Review from NerdGirlVamp
This was an interesting piece to review from the point of view that the author states up front that it is an 8 chapter excerpt and yet they do not feature the main protagonist from the full novel that they relate to.
That being said the world created is definitely interesting, as are the characters that the author introduces during this time. The author has got the world well developed in their mind and they do a good job of getting this across to the reader. With only 62 pages to judge from I can tell you that in my opinion this work has great potential. If the author can keep the standard this high through a whole novel it will certainly appeal to fantasy lovers out there especially if they like a little sci fi feel mixed in (which I do).
I would definitely be interested in seeing what happens when the full novel comes to fruition.
Review from Indie Book Reviewer, Zach Tyo
I was approached by author K.L. Abbott in regards to a story entitled House of Neotar. The request was a bit different than I’m used to, but one I’m glad I kept an open mind to it. The House of Neotar is actually an excerpt from a story entitled Kindler of Flames which is part of an even bigger series Abbott is soon to publish.
I’ve been approached for excerpts before, most of them the same unfinished 10 pages that many send out to agents and after reading and realizing how not ready they are I contact the author and scrap the project until a later date when they are closer to publishing. So when Abbott approached me in regards to reading an 8-chapter portion in the center of her book I was skeptical to say the least, particularly when told the story lacked the main protagonist. Despite my skepticism I’m more than glad I decided to move forward with reading this story.
Those of you that frequent my page know that I like to write my own short synopsis of the early portion of a story, highlighting some of the particulars that draw me to the story. I feel that the synopsis of this part of the overall story is told better than me by the author herself:
“Driana and Zelphinae go to live with Dmitri and Nreid in the House of Neotar, where bonds are shared, and then shattered; where the past is remembered, the present revealed and the future lays in ruin. In a world of deception, intrigue and powerful secrets, three young children must survive the great danger that connects them all, to save themselves and the ones they love.”
Since this is an excerpt I’m going to do my review portion a bit different. Instead of an official “What I liked” portion I’m going to skip straight ahead to the ratings portion. *A note this is based on the excerpt alone. I will be doing a follow up review once the story is published next year.
9/10 for readability – Its apparent from these 8 chapters that Abbott is a very strong writer. Her writing paints a wonderful picture of the world she has created all the while it moves at a smooth pace that keeps you turning the pages. If the full story continues this pattern it will be a wonderful read, as a whole.
XX/XX for story – Being that this is only a portion of the overall story, there is no real way for me to rate this story. The 8 chapters are told well and are solid, but without seeing more I cannot give it a true rating.
9/10 for characters – All the characters from this excerpt share one common trait, they’re all wonderful. Each one has a depth to him/her that leaves a memorable stamp. Being that these 8 chapters lack the main protagonist, I’m more than excited to see who there is to meet beyond the few I’ve met so far.
A big thank you to K. L. Abbott herself for contacting me regarding this excerpt. I’m more than excited for the finished product and I will be doing a full-review next summer when it’s released.
“My very first impression was simply – wow! This is such extraordinary writing. It is a pleasure to read. Taerah is a fascinating character and her point of view makes for an interesting place to start. The reader is given the impression that her powers are almost unlimited and I am very interested in how you form a narrative around that without ending up with an entirely too powerful character … great plot hook! In fact, the structure here is wonderful to really draw readers in, and the characterisation – having a goddess as a point of view character – is original and refreshing.” – Nathalie Andrews, GCP
“I adore your writing style! I like poetry and always admire stories in which the writer actually WRITES rather than just lays out facts on paper, and you’re one of a very few people I see nowadays who really seems to care about rhythm and word choice.
With characters and story, there is little to fault. You have a good balance between Xaeviere’s thoughts, dialogue, and Taerah’s more expanded consciousness and vision. The variation is excellent and is reflected in minor changes in your writing style.
I enjoyed the mythical descriptions of the planets very much. It raises the story up so that it feels like a religious tract and at the same time you are balancing it with a very personal story. That’s a big selling point for me. It feels refreshingly original.” – Nathalie Andrews, GCP
“The writing is really strong. You basically have everything you need: a fast-paced plot, strong, confident characterisation, good in-character dialogue and lots and lots of imagination and reality. That is the case throughout your work, but it is such a unique thing, as I so often read manuscripts that feel like they are copying what they have seen of someone’s favourite genre.
Nescada, for me, is currently sitting in its own little niche (both a blessing and a curse with a first novel) because it straddles a fantasy/spiritual genre and also science fiction. There is a fabulous blending of magic and technology. It could almost be left up to the readership to decide how much is technology by a different name. how much is simply alien, and how much is the divine or the magical.
I’m on the edge of my seat for how all of these characters and events and places finally come together. I’m still a sucker for angst-ridden young men so I’m particularly interested in Dmitri’s fate, but that really is purely subjective; I think you’ve done a great job on all the characters.
I’ll be recommending you to many of my friends once it’s done.” – Nathalie Andrews, GCP